In a recent Sunday issue of the New York Times, I came upon a 12-page insert promoting The Economist, a wonderful magazine that I’ve enjoyed for years. The production values of The Economist’s slick piece, designed to attract new subscribers, were absolutely first rate. The insert featured four-color printing, attractive art direction, a terrific “free trial” offer, etc.nThere was one big problem, however. The two-page pitch letter, that was part of the mailer, sounded as if it was written by a non-native speaker. I just don’t get it. I wish someone could explain to me how a letter like this ever sees the light of day. Here . . . read the first two paragraphs of the letter yourself and see what YOU think of it:n”Dear Colleague:nThere is no doubt that The Economist is enjoying an unprecedented dynamism in the latter half of its second century. Its unlikely name is bandied about and bragged upon in the highest places. Our essentiality has arrived. The interdependency of the world has been brought home all too clearly. The case for global intelligence has been  made. The Economist provides it in a unique and refreshing  way. Thus, our reputation.”nSee what I mean? Instead of trying to appear so darn erudite, (and winding up sounding muddled), the copywriter of the letter should have stuck to basics. How should the copywriter have begun the letter? More importantly, how should YOU begin YOUR next sales letter? My advice to all non-professional copywriters is to come out swinging. Make your offer right up front!nLet me show you how much better the Economist letter would  have been had the copywriter skipped the fluff and led with the offer:n”Dear Friend:nBill Gates, the Chairman of Microsoft, recently said, “The magazine I spend most of my days reading is The Economist.” Larry Ellison, CEO of Oracle, said, “I used to think. Now  I just read The Economist.”nIf you want to see for yourself why The Economist has such incredibly enthusiastic (and successful) readers, here’s a no-risk FREE offer not to be missed . . . Return the postage-paid “Free Trial Acceptance Card” and I’ll make sure you get four free issues of The Economist at no cost and with no obligation to continue. All I ask is that YOU be the judge . . . etc.”nYou get the picture. When you’re starting a letter, set things up quickly, then plunge right into the offer. You won’t go too far wrong. (NOTE: Those terrific Gates and Ellison quotes are real by the way!)nIvan Levison is an award-winning, direct response freelance copywriter. Download a free copy of his new report, “101 Ways To Double Your Response Rates!” at http://www.levison.com/subscribe. Contact Ivan any time at ivan@levison.com